In My Sanctuary, by Imrogue

Imrogue

In My Sanctuary

Tip tap tip tap echoed in my sanctuary

Each day comes extra ordinarily

When I swim across the ocean of poetry

Filled with new lights for words actually

Many were in deep melancholy

Some were shared sensuously

Caverns of secrets, sometimes lustfully

Kept in the columns of boundary

Tip tap tip tap echoed in my sanctuary

Each day comes extra ordinarily

When I swim the ocean of poetry

I’d like to tread water vigorously

In hopes to swim one day gracefully.

(20150412)

D. Thurmond aka JEF (James Everett Falcon)

over 4 years

Very well done, you are growing.

Geek Poet

about 5 years

Nice use of the swimming metaphor. I do have one problem with the word ethereally It didn't gel in my head. In poetic terms it means airy, astral, fanciful, nebulous, whimsical. In the adjective it is godlike, holy, heavenly, perfect, intangibly, lightly. Other than that it's a well constructed piece. I imagine the afterlife to be more concrete in a psychic manifestation of our consciousness. I would not want it to be ethereal. But in a solid state within our minds. In permanence rests the cornerstone of faith. Absolute certainty and assurance of God's love, wherein the absence of time constructs a magnificent citadel of our immortal souls

Imrogue

over 4 years

used gracefully instead... better fit?

Charlotte B. Williams

over 5 years

I agree with Mr.Martin, also the drawing of you is very nice.

Imrogue

over 5 years

Thank you so much for a very nice comment! :)

Robert L. Martin

over 5 years

You're poems seem to be getting better each day. You have a lot of talent. Keep up the good work. You have many years ahead of you. Stay focused. Keep writing. "In My Sanctuary" is very well constructed. Good work.