Creation is Watching

Perspective of Creation watching the Lovers
Two figures on a mountainside
Embracing as the Heavens cry
Creation has waited so long
Finally love is found!
Watching in wonder…
 
Creation treasures these moments the most
 
Creations song for the Lovers
As Clouded veils honor them with thoughtful tears
Heavenly stars demand cantata
The Wind and Rain play their enchanted hymns
With the refrain of Thunder and Lightning
Creation has only one care
 
Two together and holding each other near
 
The Lovers song to Creation
Their love becomes like holy wine
Pouring itself upon thirsty skin
Each word prayed like living streams
Nothing will ever change
 
After all these years these feeling remain the same
 
Perspective of the Lovers watching Creation
Two Lovers embracing on the mountainside
Watching in wonder the world before them
They have waited so long
Finally love is found
 
These moments they treasure the most
 
 
Remember…
When you watch Creation– Creation is watching you

Not sure if I should let this one stand or give it the full treatment.

I like the idea of creation watching... but not sure if this poem evokes any emotion in the reader.

Input?

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Cory Garcia
over 4 years

Thank you sister poet

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

Thank you brother that means a lot!

Richard Walker
over 6 years

Creation is watching, WE watch the world and we are seen..This is an excellent work and a favourite

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

It'll be worth the wait to get your name on that list! :)

james matthew coleman
over 6 years

Wow, thank you. I will absolutely look into it! I appreciate you sending me the link. I don't think you're going to have any problems achieving your goal. I'm going to do a little research on the award you mentioned, sounds interesting :)

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

Thank you :)Not sure why I write... that bothers me...why do I write...I do not know...
But I do know that I'd rather stop breathing than have to stop ;)Publications:
My goal is to win the Walt Whitman Award :)If you have not looked into it yet... Look into it!!!If you have not published a book yet then wait a bit and strive to win this... when you do get your name listed among the winners let me know and I'll buy myself a copy!

james matthew coleman
over 6 years

You are an extremely good poet. Do you mind if I ask, is your writing just for personal enjoyment or is there anything else you do with it? e.g. writing classes, book clubs or publications

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

I hear you brother.Looks like the words win... this time :)

james matthew coleman
over 6 years

It's all very good. I have to agree with Amber, 'Creations song for the Lovers' evokes more feeling for me personally. Besides the beautiful wording, this piece lends more involvement on creations behalf to the lovers. It's as if creation is an active participant in their love, as opposed to just being there to witness it.

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

Thanks brother!

Danny MF'n Stone
over 6 years

I've said it once, and I'll say it again. Well written, enjoy reading everything you put out.

Amber M. Royse
over 6 years

You are welcome ! :)

Cory Garcia
over 6 years

:) Thanks and thank you for helping me find my voice in this one :)

Amber M. Royse
over 6 years

As Clouded veils honor them with thoughtful tears
Heavenly stars demand cantata
The Wind and Rain play their enchanted hymns
With the refrain of Thunder and Lightning
Creation has only one careTwo together and holding each other near

Amber M. Royse
over 6 years

Speaking on behalf of myself: I can feel emotion in this one ...The mountains , the surroundings are a familiar place for you , it's personal .....Observing the truest love there is .after a long wait .Creation concentrating solely on the embrace of two people who have always loved each other .....Tis' a true blessing for you , mother nature and all of humanity ! :)

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