Kay

Kay


 

Purple mass thickened
Around each failure
That came around to save
The princess in the tower
For as the evil witch had kept
Her in there for eighteen years
her hair grew longer then the tower
It was golden and strong
Waiting for the true hero to climb upon it To reach for the damsel and distressed Repunzel
 
The purple mass was the lady in the black
A cloak she had worn
No man knew who this creature was but only Repunzel
Herself had watched theses men’s death await them
 
As soon she was about to turn nineteen
A man had come while the evil witch was away
He had timed it right on an accident
He found this tower in the middle of no where
as he had climbed with only knives
Had saw a young beautiful lady smiling with relief while combing her hair  
She told the man I knew you would come
Because of her dreams had kept her faith strong
They ran away together
On a happily ever after .

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-K
almost 6 years

well thank you :)

Cory Garcia
almost 6 years

He is saying he loves your poem... and thought some wordplay using the warriors tools of the trade could put it over the top (just in case you hadn't thought of using them)...his examples for wordplay with the warriors tools are...
"like these my many coated man
shields his hot hunger from the wind
and hooded with a smile
commits his private murder to the mind."He wasnt knocking you and he seldom comments unless he sees something in you lol...It was a compliment ;)I think he sees in you what i do :)I am completely in love with your fairytale poems and quite selfishly will admit that any improvements you make are all the better for me to enjoy!!!Keep it up... I absolutely love them!!!

-K
almost 6 years

:) thanks

-K
almost 6 years

alright?

Cory Garcia
almost 6 years

I love it :)her hair grew longer then the tower
It was golden and strong
Waiting for the true hero to climb upon it To reach for the damsel and distressed Repunzel

roy  k  austin
almost 6 years

Pare down somewhat and give it form-quite nice poetically.Be inspired by such as this-"like these my many coated man
shields his hot hunger from the wind
and hooded with a smile
commits his private murder to the mind."Notice all the norms of the CRAFT are present herein.

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