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The future looks bleak
As he stared into the abyss
For it will be a world
Where he will not exist!
 
But at least tomorrow
He won’t be here;
No joys, but no more pain
No hopes, but no more fear
 
Oblivion’s attractive
To a soul uncaring,
Disengaged from everyone,
In silence suffering
 
So into the whirlwind
He let himself go
Just an autumn leaf
Breaking from the bough
 
Far away he flew
From the depths of despair
Till consciousness lost
In the rarefied air!
 
Perhaps he could have
Turned to Him
To find meaning in life
Before the lights grew dim
 
And held on to Him
To lift himself from the abyss;
Engaged Him such that
Instead of perdition, find bliss!
 
04-18-2017
Copyright Vic A Evora

I wrote this poem yesterday based on a dream I had recently. This morning I heard that Aaron Hernandez (a convicted murderer) committed suicide. Sadly... "into the whirlwind, he let himself go" and it is much too late for him to "find bliss".

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C.R.Stanger
2 months

i forgot how much i loved this one too...i came back to read it again

C.R.Stanger
almost 2 years

VIC!.....good to be back...i keep telling everyone i comment on that i have acquired a smart phone again...no more pathetic 90s phone...with no internet...i know how did i ever make it...well it was kinda nice..not internet..no drama..or fake news posts...in other words peace..i live in the woods of texas...dont have home internet so computer i have but not net...i mean really...what a peasant...haha but i was forced by work to get a smart phone...ANYWAYS...point of the story i can now come back to this marvelous site..and read the marvelous poetry this websites users...anyways now that I'm done talking about myself...i can say how much i liked this poem the best out of the ones I've read of yours just now.
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And held on to Him
To lift himself from the abyss;
Engaged Him such that
Instead of perdition, find bliss!

this rhyming and beat is perfect ...i really like this line best...may be cliche of me to say the last stanza was the best..but it wrapped it up... and its twisted up word wise instead of the same ol same ol way i catch myself writing things sometimes..very poetic...(7 min later) yea just read it again ...i can say i was a little taken aback how much more it meant ...i think every poem should at least be read twice..always more to see...and as always i love the substance ..or what its about..pretty sad thing to write about but strong

Vic
Vic
almost 2 years

Thanks for liking Catherine.

Glad you're back. I see that you have revised some of your poems. I should read them again.

J Ann Crowder
about 2 years

It's sad that some die as a completely lost soul. There is so much sorrow in the world, much of it caused by our own making. However, joy is all around us too. I like to write about all to good and the bad. There is a reason we have the opposition. Some pretty amazing people have been made out of opposition. Hernadez perhaps chose to become bitter? I don't know the entire story but he didn't choose the the bliss, that is obvious. I've seen two completely different people suffer the same type of life and come out either choosing so differently depending on how they chose to react to their environment. Again, I really don't know his life story but he was definitely a very angry, bitter person. Thanks for the reminder to always choose the bliss!

Vic
Vic
about 2 years

I wasn't really talking about evil in this poem. I am actually talking about hopelessness and despair, two things that can propel someone to jump into the abyss. Yes, we'd like to think of Hernandez as a bad man. That's besides the point - Bad or not, he lost hope and that's why he took his own life.

J Ann Crowder
J Ann Crowder
about 2 years

True.

Nelson D Reyes
about 2 years

"Souls uncaring" find bliss in hell, in hell or still on earth.
I suppose they do find it in hell and hasten to get there
as the situation on earth, the caring souls' paradise, gets
untenable that they "whirlwind" to abyss and bathe in fire
laughing, ever uncaring.
And you're right, forgiveness is always there-all one has to
do is ask and one can rise from hell. I'd like to believe this.
Nice poem. Like. Thanks Brod.

Vic
Vic
about 2 years

Thank you Brod.

Vic
Vic
about 2 years

Please see my reply to Jenifer's comment.

Barb Clarke
about 2 years

Sorry for the misunderstanding. It is still a beautiful poem.

Barb Clarke
about 2 years

So sad that someone that young and talented has died, your poem is a nice tribute!

Vic
Vic
about 2 years

Thank you for liking Barb. However, I did not intend it as a tribute to Aaron Hernandez, who after all is a convicted murderer serving a life sentence with no chance of parole. Rather, I intended it more as a cautionary tale.

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